The story continues unabated;
of indoctrination and domination,
a story unhappily played out
everywhere, in every nation.
The strong child forges the link
and traps the meek in their ring,
knowing only that a collared bird
is far less likely to fly and sing.
Kaya’s found the key now
and she’s approaching the golden lock;
if she can free this scaly, pretty, bird,
the dumb girls three are in for a shock…
So, I had some story thought… vague so the author can adapt it
DM: You enter the school with your newly acquired friend and encounter “the moochers” (her old friends). Roll for initiative.
* roll roll *
DM:The turn order is:
1. Moochers
2. Cleo
3. Kaya OS
DM:Moochers tell Kaya to go away
Cleo defends Kaya
Kaya OS prepares a move
DM:Moochers attempt to intimidate the protagonists
Kaya OS: I roll for intimidation. I will add some fire too.
* roll roll *
DM: now roll for fire
* roll roll *
if (fire (1-10)){
DM: You succeeded you intimidation check. The moochers leave.
end
}
else (fire (11-20))
DM: Fire bathes the ground at the moochers’s feet.
DM: Moochers roll for reflex and manage to dodge the flames
if (fire(20)){
DM: but only just
}
Kaya OS: Success!
Kernel Panic! The object pointed to by the void* was not an EnergyUnit!!!
Failed to replenish energy! Likely cause: TO MUCH FIRE!
Dumping core…
Severe: Failed to dump core! Could not write to /dev/mem!
Attempting to sync disks……
Failed to sync to /dev/mem!
if (fire(<20)){
Good Night world!
end
}
/dev/lungs stopped
/dev/heart stopped
Goodbye world…
(Kai attempts rescue operations…)
It was a suggestion. I am aware that it is your story, so I am ok if you cherry pick things. I just thought it would be a little more interesting if she had to go to the hospital due to flames.
Bloody hell, not again! **starts an IO access, pumps in some adrenaline and starts CPR** Okay, we have V-fib, I can work with that…charging…CLEAR! **FWAZAP**
Nice job of aging the kids, Robin! Might be a tiny bit overendowed for juniorhigh, but overall very well done. No problem distinguishing the younger and older versions, but the older versions are still obviously quite young.
I think it’s interesting that only Cleo’s and the blonde’s hairstyles have changed enough to notice. Cleo’s is just a bit longer and the blonde’s appears ‘fuller’ and just a tad more ‘styled’.
Also; notice how often the blonde girl’s eyes are closed, indicating strong smiling, in this arc? I wonder if she’s a stereotypical bubbly airhead.
Cleo’s expressions and body language are good in this strip, but I am particularly pleased with panel four.
Well at least she now have one real friend also Cleo should be careful Leonard the platypus is around
I think Leonard only resides in the picarto chat xD
The story continues unabated;
of indoctrination and domination,
a story unhappily played out
everywhere, in every nation.
The strong child forges the link
and traps the meek in their ring,
knowing only that a collared bird
is far less likely to fly and sing.
Kaya’s found the key now
and she’s approaching the golden lock;
if she can free this scaly, pretty, bird,
the dumb girls three are in for a shock…
Poor Cleo, putting up with mooches because she’s afraid to be alone. Let’s hear it for persistent Kaya.
Hip hip hooray!
Kaya, the cute heroine xD
“So I tried to make some new friends. Unfortunately I accidentally cloned the ones I had before.”
and then they followed me to school
So, I had some story thought… vague so the author can adapt it
DM: You enter the school with your newly acquired friend and encounter “the moochers” (her old friends). Roll for initiative.
* roll roll *
DM:The turn order is:
1. Moochers
2. Cleo
3. Kaya OS
DM:Moochers tell Kaya to go away
Cleo defends Kaya
Kaya OS prepares a move
DM:Moochers attempt to intimidate the protagonists
Kaya OS: I roll for intimidation. I will add some fire too.
* roll roll *
DM: now roll for fire
* roll roll *
if (fire (1-10)){
DM: You succeeded you intimidation check. The moochers leave.
end
}
else (fire (11-20))
DM: Fire bathes the ground at the moochers’s feet.
DM: Moochers roll for reflex and manage to dodge the flames
if (fire(20)){
DM: but only just
}
Kaya OS: Success!
Kernel Panic! The object pointed to by the void* was not an EnergyUnit!!!
Failed to replenish energy! Likely cause: TO MUCH FIRE!
Dumping core…
Severe: Failed to dump core! Could not write to /dev/mem!
Attempting to sync disks……
Failed to sync to /dev/mem!
if (fire(<20)){
Good Night world!
end
}
/dev/lungs stopped
/dev/heart stopped
Goodbye world…
(Kai attempts rescue operations…)
I liked it until the stopping of vital organs. Let’s delete that function xD
It was a suggestion. I am aware that it is your story, so I am ok if you cherry pick things. I just thought it would be a little more interesting if she had to go to the hospital due to flames.
Bloody hell, not again! **starts an IO access, pumps in some adrenaline and starts CPR** Okay, we have V-fib, I can work with that…charging…CLEAR! **FWAZAP**
Nice job of aging the kids, Robin! Might be a tiny bit overendowed for juniorhigh, but overall very well done. No problem distinguishing the younger and older versions, but the older versions are still obviously quite young.
I thought the short haired girl was a boy until the fourth panel of this strip. I guess I’m still a bit old fashioned about girls hairstyles. LOL.
I think it’s interesting that only Cleo’s and the blonde’s hairstyles have changed enough to notice. Cleo’s is just a bit longer and the blonde’s appears ‘fuller’ and just a tad more ‘styled’.
Also; notice how often the blonde girl’s eyes are closed, indicating strong smiling, in this arc? I wonder if she’s a stereotypical bubbly airhead.
Cleo’s expressions and body language are good in this strip, but I am particularly pleased with panel four.
Persistence, a vice or a virtue?
Definitely “yes”.
you draw very well. this comic is amazing!